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Recently published figures show that wild life population around the world has decreased by around 50% over the fifty years. What can we do to help protect the wild life round the world?

It is a universally accepted fact that wild animal inhabitants have been threatened and reduced over the past years.
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 essay will discuss the causes and effects of a reduction in wildlife
animals
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 including a logical solution for animal conservation. A number of factors may account for decreasing wild
animals
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' growth rate, but one main cause is the process of human civilizations. To accommodate and feed our world's population, we exploit and destroy every
last
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 square meter of land which is mostly used by other
species
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 on earth.
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, the destruction of rainforests in African countries has made imbalance effect on the earth’s climate as
animals
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 absorb oxygen and produce carbon dioxide to stabilize their natural habitats. Another reason is keeping these
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 in confined small places to protect them against food availability bad weather and predators is a prime cause of the growth rate reduction.
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 keeping these
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 in the zoo is safe and costly as it demands a lot of investment, they would not be able to breathe and get fresh air when we isolate them from their natural habitats, resulting in the extinction of a
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. To solve
this
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 problem we must put endless efforts to conserve the animal population on the earth planet. It is hard to imagine our world without
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.
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, we should spend huge investments to keep these creatures in their natural habitats. We should
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 avoid using harmful chemicals in the environment which may turn hazardous to other
species
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 on earth. Governments should charge penalties against those who get involved in the extinction of endangered
species
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. To conclude, while, the biological diversity of
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 has been affected due to human activities to accommodate the wild population, we must spend some resources to preserve
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 and create harmony on our planet.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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