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Some people think distance learning programmes can never be as good as traditional, face-to-face education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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There is a school of thought that believes on-campus learning is better than distance education. I fully support
this
 viewpoint and the following paragraphs explain my agreement. Learning on campus has various advantages .
Firstly
, students get better opportunities to interact with other students and teachers,
this
 in turn helps in building their social circle.
Moreover
, these social interactions
also
 provide references for future job searches
thus
, widening the scope of finding work.
For instance
, a
student
 might be able to get a reference from a teacher because they have good interaction and the teacher knows the potential of the
student
.
Secondly
, an individual who regularly attends university tries to maintain a routine in his life.
Hence
,
such
 a person is more disciplined as compared to the one who attends lectures from their comfort zone.
Thirdly
, a person pursuing his studies on campus gets more chances to engage in teamwork.
Therefore
 they
enculcate
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inculcate
 personality traits like cooperation, empathy and assertiveness in the person.
Additionally
, the experience gained to work as a team is implemented later on when one starts a professional career.
Last
 but not the least, the confidence of a
student
 grows by leaps and bounds because of facing the public in a social setting like classrooms, lecture theatres and group discussions. Whereas, a
student
 studying at home using the internet might not be as confident as the one who is gaining knowledge through physical interaction. To conclude, there are a number of merits to receiving education in a face-to-face setting like
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 brightening chances of job search, being more disciplined, learning teamwork and gaining confidence.
On the other hand
, learning through the internet or other distance media lack these qualities.
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