Some scientists believe that studying 3-year-old children can predict their criminality. To what extent do you think a crime is a product of human nature or is it possible to stop children from growing up to be criminals?

The fact about some
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believe
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in criminality being studied in the
3 year
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children is so unbelievable.
Although
,I believe that crime could be studied
from
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the product of human nature
therefore
It is possible to stop children from developing into criminals when they become adults with the few points I will mention in
this
essay.   At the age of
three
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the
child
is still so young to know or differentiate the bad from the good
therefore
examining his attitude at
this
age is wrong because
actually
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he knows nothing at
this
point of his life.
Naturally
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the
behaviour
of a
child
at
this
point is derived from his environment and his
day to day
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activities.
Also
,
I
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what the
child
sees or hears
everyday
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becomes his language because
this
could be all he understands.so,judging him from
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old I believe is so wrong.
However
,I strongly believe that the
behaviour
or the future of a
child
can only be determined by his upbringing
therefore
above every other thing or person,the
parents
or guidance of the
child
plays a large role in the life of the
child
.The
behaviour
of the
parents
around a
child
could build a concept of life in the
child
so the
parents
are advised to be a super role model to the
child
and always portray an emulative
behaviour
. There should be
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positive home training
to
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every
child
to enable him to mind himself and disengage from crime. In conclusion ,I believe that home training has enough role to play in the growing up of the
child
and so is the
behaviour
of the
parents
or guidance around the
child
and not the unbelievable scientific prediction of criminology.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • genetic predisposition
  • environmental influences
  • nurture
  • upbringing
  • intervention
  • prevention
  • risk factors
  • positive behavior
  • family structure
  • community support
  • psychological perspective
  • sociological perspective
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