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Crime is a serious and growing problem in most societies. Although many people believe that the best way to tackle this is to place people in prison for longer periods, others are of the opinion that other measures will be more effective.

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Crime
 is a serious problem rising in today's world. To tackle it, a large number of people think that
criminal
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 should place in jail for a longer
time
 for their offences, while others believe that other methods will be more effective to decrease the
crime
 rate.
This
 essay will look at both views and explain why I think that shorter prisons with psychological
treatment
 will better method for criminals to not
crimes
 again. On the one hand, there are many reasons why people think that offenders should send to
prison
.
First
 and foremost, in
prison
 due to corporal punishment by prisoners criminals, they fear committing
crimes
 again.
Also
, people feel relief to send criminal to lock up,
this
 is because the community live a good life without worries about
crimes
.
Furthermore
, during spending longer
time
 in
prison
 offenders realise their mistake to spend their half of life in jail. But due to spending longer in lockup and for corporal punishment they do not survive in the community and have no energy to work in society in their old age.
On the other hand
, in my opinion, a better way to curb
crime
 is by providing psychological
treatment
 to offenders during their short-term
time
. To illustrate
this
, giving psychological
treatment
 to their offence will be beneficial for them to realise their past mistakes.
For example
, countries like Netherland adapt these methods to apply to their criminal and
also
 announce offender's
prison
 term
time
 will be no more than six years but must get psychological
treatment
 during their period in jail, and
as a result
, from the
last
 few year's records can be seen that the
crime
 rate in Netherland is decreasing dramatically. In conclusion, in my opinion, providing short
prison
 along with mental
treatment
 help individuals to not
crime
 again and
also
 they can realise their past
crimes
 only by
this
 we can decrease the
crime
 rate in
this
 world.
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