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Many people see animals as tools to be used by humans to better their lives. They believe animals should help feed us and keep us healthy by being subjects to experiments that will lead to new medications and medical processes. Others believe that animals should have the same rights to a good life as humans. Discuss both views and state your own.

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It is often argued that
animals
 should be used for consumption or for experimental research for the betterment and advancement of human lives, while others think that they should be given fair treatment just as well.
This
 essay will explain both opinions before giving a conclusion. On the one hand, it's been practised since ancient times to
use
animals
 as
food
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. It is
also
 common to
use
 them for research purposes for progression of the society. Animal testing contributes to life-saving cures and treatments. It is crucial to
use
 them to ensure the safety of vaccines and various medical products.
For instance
, the
use
 of vaccines to defend people against sicknesses like coronavirus, flu, dengue and etc. Before giving medicines and vaccines to people, they have to make sure that it is safe and will not cause harm.
Therefore
, they have to test it on
animals
first
 since they are similar to human beings in some way and they
also
 have a shorter life cycle compared to humans.
On the other hand
, using
animals
 for research experiments is cruel and very inhumane to do. Even though there are laws and regulations that prevented animal abuse, some researchers are still doing experiments that lead to animal cruelty.
In addition
, there is a variety of methods to conduct examinations that won't
use
animals
, for the reason, that even though treatments are safe to
use
 in
animals
, it doesn't mean it is
also
 safe to
use
 on humans. In my opinion, using
animals
 for medical purposes may probably aid people in several sicknesses,
however
, it doesn't guarantee that the effects it has are the same as humans.
Therefore
, there might be another approach to
use
 without using
animals
, for the benefit of society.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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