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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do yoy think this is a positive or negative development?

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The medical system plays a vital role in
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 modern technology. Nowadays, there is a rapid growth in population meanwhile there is
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 a great increase in
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 problems. But
people
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 are choosing
alternative
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methods
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 to solve
health
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 problems rather than visiting their usual
doctor
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
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 I will give my opinion on
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 matter. On the one side, In
this
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 modern era, there is a huge development in medical technology. Advanced medical equipment is being used in hospitals. With
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 advanced technology,
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 fees
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 increased. A normal middle-class person cannot afford
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treatment
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 due to its expensive
treatment
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. So most
people
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 are trying
alternative
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methods
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 for
treatment
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 rather than visiting a
doctor
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.
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, During the Carona Virus attack, at the beginning of
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 attack
people
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 went to the hospital for
treatment
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 but later they started using
alternative
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methods
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 like using fever tablets, drinking hot water, eating protein food, etc to reduce the virus.
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 is due to financial problems and
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 is
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 very expensive. On the other side,
Alternative
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methods
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 may not give accurate results.
People
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 should use
alternative
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methods
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 based on their
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 conditions. If their
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 condition is serious it is better to go to the hospital and visit the
doctor
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.
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, If a person is suffering from cancer,
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 he/she cannot use
alternative
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methods
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 and risk their life. And another good example is, If a person is suffering from asthma and have a carona virus
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 he/she should visit a
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otherwise
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 breathing problem leads to death. To sum up, I think it is better to go to the hospital and visit a
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 when the
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 condition is serious. Alternate
treatment
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 can be done for small
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 issues like cold, headache, etc.
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