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Some people believe that increasing tax on various industries will reduce pollution, whereas others believe that there are better alternative ways. Discuss both the view and give your opinion

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A highly controversial issue today relates to
the
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environment
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 contamination. It is expected by many individuals that going up
tax
 on different production will apparently
decrease
 contamination, while it is believed by many people that there are other methods.
Therefore
, ahead of my opinion, both views will be discussed
further
. There are various reasons why some people are of
view
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the view
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 that increasing contribution on the different manufacturing would reduce
pollution
.
Firstly
, imposing a huge amount of
tax
 can lead
to
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industries
to use
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 more environmentally friendly methods to
decrease
pollution
.
This
 is because enforcing industries to change their previous ways to the innovative approaches by increasing cost.
For instance
, take the big car companies in developed countries as an example, municipal authorities have been imposing
the
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 high
tax
 on
production
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the production
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 of the gasoline cars, and encouraging them to produce more and more electronic automobiles.
As a result
, considering the high
tax
 on industries may have a positive impact on
pollution
 reduction.
On the contrary
, those in
favor
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 of the latter opinion have their own arguments.
To begin
 with, they claim that the better alternative ways to
decrease
pollution
 would enforce
tax
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 on the single occupant cars. If these drivers regard as
a
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taxpayers who pay a huge amount of money, the air
pollution
 will seemingly
decrease
, so they can encourage to use more public transportation like
bus
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buses
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, metro and
taxi
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taxis
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 rather than their own cars to commute. To conclude and offer my position, there are convincing
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arguments
argunents
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arguments
 both for and against considering
tax
 to reduce
pollution
 effectively;
however
, I certainly favour the latter opinion because
of
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all citizens have
responsibility
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a responsibility
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 to protect our environment.
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