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As life expectancy is increasing, people work after retirement with pay. Alternatively, some people start to work at a young age. Are these positive or negative impacts?

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Over the past few decades,
people
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 have become used to the idea that they will have to devote a larger chunk of their life to work, and some of them even continue to work after the legal
age
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 of
retirement
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. The fact is that as human life expectancy increases, only a small number of jobs will ensure that
people
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 are able to enjoy a comfortable
retirement
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, and
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, many
people
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 are choosing to enter the workforce much earlier than before. In my opinion,
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 is a negative development. I agree that starting to work at a young
age
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 is advantageous for young
people
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, but they should only consider
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 as a way of gaining experience. Having a job while studying with the aim of saving money to enjoy
retirement
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 is both unrealistic and counter-productive.
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, most part-time jobs that students can do, like bartending or tutoring, only offer quite low salaries, not enough to contribute to their
retirement
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.
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, many high-paying jobs,
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 as lawyers or doctors, require a qualification and dedication that can take up to 6 years to complete.
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 suggests that
people
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 should not consider working at a young
age
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, rather than should devote themselves to completing their education with full potential.
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,
people
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 nowadays are still fit to continue working well into their sixties or even seventies. I believe working keeps
people
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 not only mentally but
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 physically healthy, which is extremely important for elderly
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.
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, my father-in-law admits that he felt so bored and unhealthy after
retirement
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 that he had to set up a workshop near his house and has been working there ever since.
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, after
retirement
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, it might be hard to make connections. Taking on a job after
retirement
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, even working part-time in
retirement
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, may help foster new social connections. In conclusion, I understand there are reasons for young
people
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 to start their working lives earlier than the generations of their parents or grandparents.
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, working after the
retirement
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age
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 is a way to enjoy a longer life expectancy, and
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 with regards to priorities, it is not mandatory to have a job and save money from an earlier
age
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.
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