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The way many people interact with each other nowadays has dramatically changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected types of human relationship? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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's relationships positively or negatively
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the positive than the negative effects.
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, since the revolution in communication quite a number of things has changed ,
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 can interact with their loved
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 through the use of mobile phones ,not just phone call but can
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 do video and conference calls with their beloved
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, series of apps for making video and conference calls is installed in phones
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, and telegram to mention but a few.
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, Due to the economic ,crisis
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 work hard in other to meet up their daily needs,
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 the nature of work can consume
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's time, it is undeniable
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 communication among
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,
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 can perform transactions with their mobile phones without
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 of going to the bank and staying in a long queue. Modern devices
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 as computers could be used in various offices
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, helping employers and employees to carry out their work efficiently and effectively. With mobile devices , groups can meet new friends and
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 can establish business ideas with others from different diversities
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 helps to strengthen business
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 across other nations
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, builds the country's economic growth.
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, the use of modern technology has made isolation to be on the increase,
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 hardly come together ,especially with their elderly
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 and tell stories of folk tales. In conclusion, the way
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great benefit. It has made life easier, and convenient, and things can be accessible like bank transactions.
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 improved and established friendly relationships with
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 from different diversities.
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