Some schools have restricted the use of mobile phones. Is this a positive development or a negative one?

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In several
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the usage of gadgets,
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, are totally banned.
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a considerable development, as the devices influenced
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behaviour and physical during
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section. It seems to me that
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policy would probably
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either benefits or drawbacks for the
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ides
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of
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notion would be discussed
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essay. Restricting
students
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to operate their smartphones during
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class improves their
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concentration
. They would be more
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as a result
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of the lack of distraction. Social media,
for instance
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, sometimes produces notification
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which
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will plague the
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attention to the materials that had been taught. Eventually, both teachers and
students
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are inevitably distracted.
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the classes would run worse.
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,
phone
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is a source of focus
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disruption
distruption
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disruption
during the study session.
In addition
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, the use of mobile phones
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linked to
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health
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.
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frequent operation of
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some parts of
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the body
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would suffer cause of it.
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, too often staring
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gadget surfaces
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occasionally
ocassionaly
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occasionally
irritate their eyes.
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is not good for the
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visibility healthiness in long-term of
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.
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the
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access during class would not only be better for their health but
also
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for their
consentration
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concentration
in the classroom. To conclude,
forbiding
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forbidding
the student to use their mobile phones has
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advantages
adventages
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advantages
.
This
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not only
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students
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their focus but
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this
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also
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potential to harm the body as
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effect.
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, If
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all nations restrict the usage of gadgets, both
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student’s
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consentration
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concentration
and health would be
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increased
incrased
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increased
.
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