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In some countries, owning a home rather than renting one is very important for people. Why might this be case? Do you think this is a positive or negative situation?

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Without any doubt,society is divided into two groups as per the distinct mindset of different people.In
few
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a few
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 nations,owning a
house
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 rather than renting one.
A lots
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A lot
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 of people buy the
house
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 mostly near
around
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apply
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the
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apply
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tourist places and out of
the
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India.
This
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 my point of view will be elaborated in the conclusion. To commence with,buying
the
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house
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 in some countries is necessary as in the country where the individual
live
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lives
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.To cite an example,if a person has a home in their native country ,they can live their life in
easy
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an easy
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 manner and they can live with their family together .
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 ,they can celebrate all festivals together
as
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in their way . They can
also
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 invite their love once in the celebration like friends and relatives on
biirthday
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birthday
birthdays
 parties, Diwali celebration etcetera.
On the other hand
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,
this
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also
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 has some demerits
such
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 as having a home in different corners of the world
increase
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increases
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 their expense of
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maintenance
maintainance
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maintenance
 and there
is
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are
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 a waste
resources
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of resources
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 as people are expanding more as compared to
there
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their
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need
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needs
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.
For instance
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,if a person
buy
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buys
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 a home in different
countries
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country
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 they have to
been
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be
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the
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apply
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all cost of the
houses
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house
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,
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this
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which
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 will elevate the expense of
person
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the person
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 .
However
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 ,public living on rent is more beneficial as they can
changed
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 the
house
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 any time
,
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when their company transfer them. In a nutshell,
although
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it
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isit
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 important to purchase a
house
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 as a human can live
in
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on
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 their own as they wish to live yet on rent all these facilities are not offered.I personally believed that
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house
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a house
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 is essential in their resident place as to other places.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • ownership
  • renting
  • importance
  • sense of security
  • stability
  • financial investment
  • asset
  • customize
  • decorate
  • belonging
  • community
  • potential
  • future generations
  • long-term
  • cost advantage
  • control
  • living space
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