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Many people are working longer and longer hours. What are the reasons and effects?

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Time plays a very crucial role in everybody's life. Nowadays, Pupils are working more
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 along with their working
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. In
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 essay, I will discuss the reasons and the effects and
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 I will give my opinion on
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 matter with examples. On the one side, Some communities are working longer
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 due to their working conditions and rules. Normal
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 who don't have any certification will
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 in some areas for gaining money.
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, A person, who doesn't have any certificates will choose to
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 in a factory with more working
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 because he/she does not have another option. and another good example, A software employee who works almost 10 to 12
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 due to their agreements and less experience. On the other side, Some communities are working for more
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 to gain knowledge. Some
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 want to reach their goals along with their
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. Nowadays, some
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 are doing multiple jobs to reach their goals and
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 to build their financial status.
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, A person who is working as a software employee had an interest in acting so he/she works in these two areas to balance his/her
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 and passion in life. To sum up, In my view there are reasons to
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 for more
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 but working for longer
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 will lead to health problems like stress, etc. I think it is better to take a rest when there is leisure time. And if
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 want to
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 on their goals it is better to
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 during off days.
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