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Many people are working longer and longer hours. What are the reasons and effects?

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Time plays a very crucial role in everybody's life. Nowadays, Pupils are working more
hours
 along with their working
hours
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the reasons and the effects and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter with examples. On the one side, Some communities are working longer
hours
 due to their working conditions and rules. Normal
people
 who don't have any certification will
work
 in some areas for gaining money.
For example
, A person, who doesn't have any certificates will choose to
work
 in a factory with more working
hours
 because he/she does not have another option. and another good example, A software employee who works almost 10 to 12
hours
 due to their agreements and less experience. On the other side, Some communities are working for more
hours
 to gain knowledge. Some
people
 want to reach their goals along with their
work
. Nowadays, some
people
 are doing multiple jobs to reach their goals and
also
 to build their financial status.
For instance
, A person who is working as a software employee had an interest in acting so he/she works in these two areas to balance his/her
work
 and passion in life. To sum up, In my view there are reasons to
work
 for more
hours
 but working for longer
hours
 will lead to health problems like stress, etc. I think it is better to take a rest when there is leisure time. And if
people
 want to
work
 on their goals it is better to
work
 during off days.
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