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Some people say that Government should break down all the historic building and replace them with modern buildings. Do you agree or disagree.

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The bar chart compares the
percentage
 of different five
Australia's
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 cities, namely Sydney,
Melbourme
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Melbourne
, Brisbane, Adelaide and Hobart, in terms of consuming habits of
coffee
 and tea. Overall, A similar trend can be seen in these four cities, without Adelaide, while each
kinds
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 of
sector
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has
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 specific trends. What stood out in
this
 chat is the proportion of bought instant
coffee
 in
last
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the last
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 four weeks in Adelaide.
This
 city only could see the largest share in
this
sector
 at almost
50percent
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50 percent
, which compete with the
percentage
 of people went to
cafe
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a cafe
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 in
last
 4weeks.
Convercely
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,
the
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they
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remain
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 four countries show a similar trend,
which
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 the
percentage
 of people who bought
coffee
 is the least and the
percentage
 of customers who went to a cafe is the highest.
Next
forcusing
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focusing
 on features in each
sector
. Sydney and
Melbourme
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Melbourne
 showed
higher
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percentage
 in the
sector
 of fresh
caffee
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coffee
 and a cafe, while the
percentage
 of instant
coffee
 in Brisbane and Hobart is higher than the others, at 53
percent
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 and 54
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 respectively.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • invaluable assets
  • tangible connection
  • architectural heritage
  • modernization
  • energy efficiency
  • adaptive reuse
  • historical significance
  • economic implications
  • sustainable
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