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Band 7.5

Some people think that zoo are cruel and all zoos should closed.However, some people think zoo can help protect animals Discuss both views and give your own opinion

It is often argued by some people that
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 should be shut down, and leave
animals
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 to live freely, on the other contrary opine that
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 is the safest place for
animals
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. I tend to discuss both views in the following paragraphs and will give my state of point. At the outset,
zoos
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 are meant to protect
animals
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. People are appointed to take good care of wild
animals
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 in the
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. The caretaker provides them food and water at the scheduled time, which probably they would not get outside the
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 premises.
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, the
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 provides a lot of facilities
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 as shelter, food, water etcetera to all types of species.
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, during harsh weather,
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 safe place protects the creatures from death. So,
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 are life savers for many
animals
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.
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, some people think that species remain bounded in their cages, so, they are only surviving, not living their life to the fullest.
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, a lion is a king of the jungle and he always wants to live free without any restriction but in , the
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 he is behind the bars. In fact, they are not living in a natural environment and
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 leads to detrimental health.
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, they should be kept in wildlife sanctuaries where they can live free and can be protected as well.
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 is the best way to protect them. To put it in a nutshell,
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zoos
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 are for animal protection ,
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,
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 is not a natural habitat, so ,
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, they should be kept in their natural habitat with full care.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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