Some people think that it is good to raise children in a city. Others argue that it is better for children to grow up in the countryside. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

To begin
with the urban
area
, there are several advantages for teenagers to be here in their childhood.
First
of all, better education is a key element. Because
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the majority of
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schools and universities are located in the city
area
, it provides a number of benefits to children,
such
as sports facilities, quality of education and learning standard
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, which are usually not available in the village school or college. Health safety,
additionally
, is
also
a vital reason to choose downtown. If any child met with an accident or disease and required immediate attention, a number of multi-specialist hospitals will be there to secure his life in
urban
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area
.
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, health benefits and quality education are positive sides for children to grow in
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