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New technologies have changed the way children spend their free time. Do advantages of this outweigh disadvantages?

#technologies #children #time #outweigh
Nowadays, the invention of the latest
technology
 has a tremendous impact on
children
 in terms of how spend on leisure activities.
This
 is a controversial topic because it has two contrasting consequences. I believe that the drawbacks of
technology
 excel its benefits. On the one hand, the advantages of gadgets for
children
 are fewer. Actually, one of the main advantages of
technology
 is that it enables
children
 to access a virtual world
that is
 entertaining for
children
 there
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 of games and videos, so some of the plays contain logical improvements which will trigger
children
 to increase their IQ level. One explanation for
this
, chess is a widely known type of sport which gives an opportunity to enhance
children
's cognitive skills, including decision-making and problem-solving.
Secondly
, due to a computer being an unlimited source of information,
children
 will have a chance to acquire details about any subject. Eventually,
this
 will affects their literacy rate.
On the other hand
, the disadvantages of
technology
 are far greater. To commence with, in terms of interaction, portable devices like cellphone and laptops facilitate
children
's activities, so
instead
 of talking face to face or spending time together, they have a proclivity to chat by means of some social platforms
such
 as WhatsApp and Instagram, by doing
this
 they convict themselves to stay at home. As a consequence, as well as causing mental illnesses, it will
also
 create physical problems. To exemplify
this
, being obsessed with
technology
 results sedentary lifestyle.
Likewise
, it leads to spoil meal times and to put weight.
Consequently
, being addicted to tech undermines the immune system.
Furthermore
, while
children
 use
technology
, they can encounter movies and advertisements that are unsuitable for their age, so these kinds of materials influence negatively their morality. To conclude,
although
 there are only a few benefits of
technology
 to
children
, I believe that the disadvantages surpass its advantages
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therefore
children
 should be kept under control by their parents.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • advantages
  • disadvantages
  • new technologies
  • children
  • free time
  • access
  • educational resources
  • information
  • development
  • key skills
  • enhancing
  • creativity
  • imagination
  • opportunity
  • connect
  • convenience
  • flexibility
  • lack
  • physical activity
  • potential
  • health issues
  • impact
  • social
  • emotional development
  • exposure
  • inappropriate content
  • addiction
  • dependency
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