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some people say that all levels of education, from primary schools to universities, too much time time is pent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills do you agree or disagree

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Many people think that throughout all educational
years
, students are being taught the
basics
 and the facts, while not taught actual skills. I disagree with their point of view for several reasons. The students through their academic educational
years
 learn both the foundations of the subjects
in addition
 to practical activities. At the beginning of their
education
, they learn the
basics
 of their mother tongue, the numbers, and the colours to be able to read , count ,and differentiate between things. At
this
 early ,stage no practical activity can be taught to them as they are too young to perform it. After that, they begin to learn about Geography, and Math subjects which
also
 do not have practical implementations.
For example
, in Finland,
the
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infants are learning the
basics
 of their language and math only in their primary and elementary
years
 of school,
although
the
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Finnish
education
 is rated the best
education
 worldwide. While I believe that youngsters are able to learn practical skills starting from the secondary educational phase, the learners are mature enough to teach
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 to them. Subjects like Science, Physics, and History are introduced to the youth. In science and physics, they do real experiments by themselves wearing all the safety clothes, while in sports they practice the suitable sports they like. Some undergraduates choose to play football, while others play swimming or basketball according to their preferences.
For instance
, in ,Egypt they have a practical exam in science and physics that students have to pass to be graduated from school. In conclusion, I hold the notion that school attendants learn both foundation and
basics
 in their early
years
, plus acquiring practical skills when they begin their secondary
education
years
.
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