It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

The fact that
talent
has been a serve controversy in recent years. While some people believed that outstanding ability from their DNA and God's gifts, others argue that
talent
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from experiences and hard work. I side with the statement that
talent
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from
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efforts. The essay shed light
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sides of
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view clarifying the conclusion. On the one hand, some people think that
talent
is a born gift.
For example
, Cristiano Jr, the
first
child of Ronaldo, is the hot search all over the world because
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the
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professional football skill. The
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are indicating that
Cristiona
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Cristina
contains the special genes of Ronaldo, which predicts that he will become a famous footballer in
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world
as
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his father.
This
means,
talent
to part of the parent's genes.
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there are many cases of talented children from their parents, it only takes up 10%.
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makes it hard to support.
On the other hand
, others believe that talents come from
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attempt
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and
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.
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by the world as
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grandiose
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, and
the
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most famous song of
him
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is "Symphony No.6". Before knowing widely, Beethoven experienced a difficult life when his mother died early and his father was an
alcohic
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alcoholic
.
However
, through many difficulties and arduous, thanks to
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relentless
ecducation
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education
dedication
and efforts, Beethoven
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created masterpieces, which
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a great contribution to the music of humanity. It is clear that, as long as
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exertion
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and study relentlessly, people will achieve success.
Therefore
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does not affect on
talent
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of a person. In conclusion, others think that
talent
is a natural gift, but I strongly believe that any person can
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becom
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become
an
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excellent
execellent
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excellent
achiever
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guidance dedication and
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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