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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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The fact that
talent
 has been a serve controversy in recent years. While some people believed that outstanding ability from their DNA and God's gifts, others argue that
talent
come
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 from experiences and hard work. I side with the statement that
talent
come
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 from
the
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efforts. The essay shed light
both
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 sides of
this
 view clarifying the conclusion. On the one hand, some people think that
talent
 is a born gift.
For example
, Cristiano Jr, the
first
 child of Ronaldo, is the hot search all over the world because
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the
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 professional football skill. The
researches
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 are indicating that
Cristiona
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Cristina
 contains the special genes of Ronaldo, which predicts that he will become a famous footballer in
whole
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 world
as
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 his father.
This
 means,
talent
 to part of the parent's genes.
Although
,
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 there are many cases of talented children from their parents, it only takes up 10%.
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 makes it hard to support.
On the other hand
, others believe that talents come from
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the attempt
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attempt
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 and
learn
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.
For instance
, Ludwig and Beethoven
recognized
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 by the world as
a
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grandiose
composer
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, and
the
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 most famous song of
him
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 is "Symphony No.6". Before knowing widely, Beethoven experienced a difficult life when his mother died early and his father was an
alcohic
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alcoholic
.
However
, through many difficulties and arduous, thanks to
the
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 relentless
ecducation
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education
dedication
 and efforts, Beethoven
has
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created masterpieces, which
has
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 a great contribution to the music of humanity. It is clear that, as long as
the
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they
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exertion
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 and study relentlessly, people will achieve success.
Therefore
,
gene
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 does not affect on
talent
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 of a person. In conclusion, others think that
talent
 is a natural gift, but I strongly believe that any person can
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become
becom
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become
 an
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excellent
execellent
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excellent
 achiever
by
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 guidance dedication and
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hard work
hardwork
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hard work
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Innate talent
  • Nurture
  • Prodigy
  • Proficiency
  • Deliberate practice
  • Physiological factors
  • Grit
  • Perseverance
  • Cultural norms
  • Structured training
  • Physical predisposition
  • Natural aptitude
  • Dedicated training
  • Societal influence
  • Passion
  • Genetic endowment
  • Skill acquisition
  • Expertise
  • Extracurricular activities
  • Mastery
  • Cognitive abilities
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