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Modern technology has made it easier for individuals to download copyrighted music and books from the internet for no charge.To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

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In
this
 digital era, it has become easy to download music and books, protected by copyright, for free from the Internet. I believe
this
 development is a negative one for several reasons. One possible drawback of
this
 tendency is that authors do not benefit financially.
In other words
, when internet piracy becomes widespread,
public
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the public
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 would not buy the products of authors due to the possibility of getting them free of charge.
This
, in turn, demotivates the artists and novelists
for example
, from pursuing their
career
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further
.
For example
, for the
last
 decade, the overall amount of money collected by official sales of movies and music has declined due to excessive cases of copyright infringement. On top of
this
,
this
 tendency is a huge disrespect to authorship and
efforts
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the efforts
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 that people put into their work. The originality of products
require
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 a great deal of work, insomniac nights,
psychological
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and psychological
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 pressure. These cannot be fulfilled only by financial resources, but only by showing emotional respect and solidarity.
Thus
, I think,
this
 trend of free download of materials has become nothing but a huge disrespect.
In addition
 to
this
,
this
 is a huge crime which is not welcomed by most European countries, as
the
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internet piracy is a violation of not only officially acknowledged legislative laws, but
also
 a violation of intellectual property, which is considered to be far more important than the materialistic property. In conclusion, the possibility of copyrighted materials
to be
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 downloaded for free is a huge negative due to
financial
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the financial
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 crack of authors and
emotional
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the emotional
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 damage they get.
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