Some say that rich countries should help poor countries with trade, health and education. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your experience.

With the arrival of
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century and
development
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of technologies, as opposed to
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, nowadays, people have
ability
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to watch films through their
smartphones
and tablets while at home.
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, due to the fact that
traditional
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the traditional
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way of watching films in a
cinema
still
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alive, people have disputes about what method of viewing
film
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is the best. From my point of view, using modern gadgets to watch
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a movie
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movie
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movies
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is the finest approach. There are not only
smartphones
and tablets in our home,
person
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a person
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also
can use his TV or PC to see a
cinema
. All those gadgets have
good
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quality
of
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a
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screen
,
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when
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where
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no pixels can't be seen. It is not necessary to go to the
cinema
toward
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for
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better
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a better
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quality
of
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the
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picture, because,
human's
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eyes
does
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not see the divergence.
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about the
sound
? Approximately five years ago, new technology of 5D
sound
had been developed.
Thus
, headphones with the 5D
sound
support could bring the same feelings as if the
person
was actually involved in the
film
. Another point is that it is cheaper than going to the
cinema
. Nowadays,
person
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a person
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has a variety of choice
subscription
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subscriptions
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to streaming services,
such
as Netflix, Yandex and IVI. One
month
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subscription payment equals
to
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one adult ticket to the
cinema
.
Furthermore
, with those services
person
will get an infinitive amount
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of TV-shows
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TV-shows
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TV shows
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and movies to watch.
On the other hand
,
cinema
also
has its own advantages.
To begin
with, the excellent
quality
of the movie. Sitting in the chairs provides
with
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a huge
screen
in front of you, unlike
smartphones
, which
screen
is one hundred
time
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times
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smaller in size.
Moreover
, the atmosphere of the
film
also
increases in grade because of
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the speakers
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, which are placed all around the hall.
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The viewer
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Viewer
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can hear
sound
from his right, left, back and front, thereby enhancing immersion in the
film
.
Besides
,
person
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a person
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has
an
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ability to bring and watch
the
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movie with his friends and the number is not limited. They can
also
immediately discuss the
film
after its ending. In conclusion, the
quality
, atmosphere and the ability to watch with friends makes going to the
cinema
a good option.
However
, from my perspective, using modern technologies and viewing via
smartphones
is the best, due to the cost, same
quality
of
sound
and
screen
.
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