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More and more people are choosing to work from home via computer. Companies are increasingly allowing their employees to do so. What might be some causes of this development?What are the benefits of doing this?

Nowadays, almost everyone thinks that
money
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 is the most important aspect for them to live and enjoy their
lives
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. We often go to work for at least eight hours or more a day to earn our salary in order to pay for daily bills, purchase daily goods or satisfy our demands.
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: a ticket to the movie theatre, shopping, and
traveling
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. But is
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 the only factor that
people
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 need to be happy? In my opinion,
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 depends on each person’s choices It is widely accepted that
money
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 plays an important role in our today’s society as it helps to improve our
lives
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 and make our society become more enjoyable and pleasurable. In Vietnam, there are lots of wealthy
people
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 as singers, masters of ceremonies or MCs, and comedians. They contribute a huge effort to our community. That leads to the result that there are a lot of fans or admirers following them and they make a lot of
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. Yet,
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 doesn’t mean all of them are happy with their
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 because those
people
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 don’t often seem to show it. In fact, many newspapers’ articles reported that some celebrities had admitted they sometimes fell into a state of stress which made them become aggressive or rude toward other
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.
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, these examples indicate that happiness doesn’t associate with those negative
behaviors
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. So if happiness is not the main factor
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 necessary for
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then
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 what are the other factors? Some
people
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 are enjoying their
lives
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 thanks to having good friends around them or following an active, positive social life which helps them reduce stress and have a positive perspective. Meanwhile, there are others who find satisfaction in daily
lives
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 when they help those who are disadvantaged, handicapped, or simply poorer than they are. From my personal experience, I prefer to spend my free time enjoying simple things like going out with my loved ones or eating out at a nice restaurant. Having more
money
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 surely can make everyone’s life become more enjoyable or better but it doesn’t mean we have to rely on earning them all the time. In conclusion, without
money
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, we can’t live to our fullest or enjoy it.
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, we have to remember that we don’t have to spend entire our
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 chasing
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 as there are many other simpler ways to pursue a relaxing, healthy lifestyle.

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Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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