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Creative artist should always be given freedom to express their own ideas in whichever way they wish.There should be no public or government restrictions on what they do. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#artist #freedom #government #restrictions
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 of expression ought to be given to
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 who make or
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perform
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perform
 art creatively as well as there should not be any restrictions from citizens or the state. I partly agree with the given idea as it can cause both negative and positive developments.
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 with, the reason why governments or civilians should restrict the
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 of
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 is that the art performed or presented should not disturb the healthy environment in societies.
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, the government of India has certain laws that were established for
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 and all performance art should go through a censor check before they realised to the public. In
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 way, not only they can mention a peaceful environment in society
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 some
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 may not take advantage of their
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 to themselves express.
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, in a few ,aspects
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 should be given to painters, movie stars, and other artmakers because they can convey imperative messages to the public creatively.
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,
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 year,there was a drawing that was trending on social media because it was conveying a message to the public about the importance of planting trees. After seeing that post, starting from school students to senior citizens started to plant trees near their residences and they tagged their pictures on the post. In conclusion,
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artists
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 without restrictions can disturb a peaceful environment among the public, to some extent
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 for creativity can
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 bring positive outcomes to society.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freedom of expression
  • cultural advancements
  • societal norms
  • push boundaries
  • censorship
  • stifling creativity
  • public sensitivity
  • cultural values
  • offensive content
  • impose strict restrictions
  • creative freedom
  • incite hate
  • artistic expression
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