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Some people believe that price is the only consideration when buying something. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

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Nowadays , a few groups of people think that prices should be in their budget for products which is the only thing that they
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 on during shopping. I disagree with it and give my own opinion. The
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 and foremost reason is that they should
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 on another side ; Like , sugar , quality of products , and services.
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 , some things are very cheap to affordable for the individual but
material
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 is not prestigious, as a
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result which does not use by us
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garbage.
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 , we are inviting new diseases because we
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unhealthy products due to the temptation ,
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, sometimes
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 cannot see the health problems of the material but they buy it
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it is on discount.
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, they should see a durable item and not only
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. People must try a product which has good quality , warranty
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and guarantee because it is
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 as important as the above.
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poverty line so they cannot afford a high
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 product,
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, some cars are made for billionaire and does not suitable for the middle class or
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 , if they would try to purchase an expensive thing , it impacts their family budget so they should
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price
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 which is beneficial for them. In conclusion, people should not encourage it due to the negative side. In my point of view , they must
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 on another thing which is more important than the
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