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Some people believe that price is the only consideration when buying something. Do you agree or disagree with this statement? Give your opinion and include relevant examples.

#people #price #consideration
Nowadays , a few groups of people think that prices should be in their budget for products which is the only thing that they
focus
 on during shopping. I disagree with it and give my own opinion. The
first
 and foremost reason is that they should
focus
 on another side ; Like , sugar , quality of products , and services.
For instance
 , some things are very cheap to affordable for the individual but
material
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the material
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 is not prestigious, as a
,
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result which does not use by us
sothat
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so that
 it becomes
a
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garbage.
Moreover
 , we are inviting new diseases because we
purchases
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unhealthy products due to the temptation ,
for example
, sometimes
crowd
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 cannot see the health problems of the material but they buy it
due to
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it is on discount.
Furthermore
, they should see a durable item and not only
focus
 on
price
. People must try a product which has good quality , warranty
,
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and guarantee because it is
also
 as important as the above.
On the other hand
 , some family belongs
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an
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poverty line so they cannot afford a high
price
 product,
for instance
, some cars are made for billionaire and does not suitable for the middle class or
another
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.
secondly
 , if they would try to purchase an expensive thing , it impacts their family budget so they should
focus
 on
price
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the price
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 which is beneficial for them. In conclusion, people should not encourage it due to the negative side. In my point of view , they must
focus
 on another thing which is more important than the
price
.
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