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Some people appoint that computer have made a life more convenient and other however each opposes and say that the computer have actually made a life Complex and stressfull discuss both these use

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Well ,the group of individual believes that
computer
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make
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life
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 easier
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, other think that it makes
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 stressful .I will be discussing both
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schools of thought prior in the subsequent paragraphs prior to the meaningful conclusion.
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 with, let us Shadow some light on the
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view point
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 of the strata of
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society
believe
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 the
computer
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 made
life
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 easier.
first
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 and foremost,
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computer
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the computer
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 is an electronic device with the help of the
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 we do our work more easily .
secondly
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, it is
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 fastest machine so it makes
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 easier and most
of
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the
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people
are
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depend
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 on the
computer
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 as the children play
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games on the
computer
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 and do their work for from the website which is available on the
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 .
moreover
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, the individual
do
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 the white
color
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 jobs which is only possible on
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computer
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a computer
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 .the computers send and receive the messages with zet speed .afterwards, these
gagets
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gadgets
were
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make
less error
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fewer errors
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 in
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comparison
comparsion
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comparison
to the
human
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humans
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 .
thus
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, it makes the man perfect
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, the group of masses think that it made
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life
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the
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stressful and complex .to start with , as we know nowadays ,every person
use
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 electronic gadgets and approximately all the jobs were possible on
computer
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 .most of the people face difficulty who are not aware
about
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 the use of
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computer
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a computer
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. the
computer
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 makes
life
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 very difficult . some of the kids use
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a computer
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computer
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computers
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 in
the
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 daily routine and they do not concentrate on their Academics and parents face lots of troubles
by
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 the
computer
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. To encapsulate, it could be concluded that after discussing both the schools of thought
on
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 the one hand,
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computer
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the computer
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 made
life
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 easier .
on the other hand
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 ,individual face lot of trouble by using
computer
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