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Some people like to work in company which offer high salaries, other prefer working in a company which offer good working atmosphere. What do you think? Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Generally, every person has to do something for living. Some
people
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 prefer to run their own business while others go for jobs. It is said that few
people
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, who do jobs, give more importance to high salaries while the remaining tend to prefer a good working environment. I would try to discuss both behaviours in the forthcoming paragraphs.
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, let's investigate those who are demanding high wages. There are some social factors
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 as healthcare needs, accommodation expenditure and school-going children's fees etc, which force
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 to show interest in money. So, to fulfil these daily needs one has to give preference to the job with high payment.
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, a trend of living lavish
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also
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 contributes to approaching a job with more money involved, because without a sufficient amount of wealth someone cannot afford a luxurious
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.
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, there is a craze ,especially in the sub-continent, Pakistan and India, to save some for the upcoming generation. Overall, all these circumstances cause an inclination towards well-paid jobs.
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, there are few
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 who like to choose a good and amicable environment to work over high salaries, because they may be trying to avoid working under conditions that are stressful.
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 are more concerned about their health both physical and mental. Sometimes, more money is earned at the cost of health and social relations. So, these
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 with less favour towards cash may prefer to spend more
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 with their families. They try to keep balance in spending
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 both for work and family because it is seen that
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 with loads of work spend little
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 with their families.
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, they would be unable to create a strong bond among family members. To conclude, in my personal opinion, doing a job is important and necessary to meet financial needs, but each person should try to create equilibrium between his professional
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 and social
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. It is not a herculean task , just requires a little
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 to spare for
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 around you.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial stability
  • advancement
  • sacrifice
  • work-life balance
  • job satisfaction
  • employee well-being
  • team collaboration
  • innovation
  • retain
  • long-term career success
  • skilled workers
  • professional growth
  • work-life harmony
  • positive atmosphere
  • supportive culture
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