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Your English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your countryYour English-speaking friend has asked for your help with a college project he/she is doing about celebrating New Year in different countries. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter • say how important New Year is to people in your country • describe how New Year is celebrated in your country • explain what you like about New Year celebrations in your country

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Dear Bob, I am writing about the topic of traditional
Chines
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Chinese
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 New
Year
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 celebration. The New
Year
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 is a kind of custom and tradition which means farmers could have a great harvest as spring comes. Nowadays, it is significantly essential because almost every Chinese
could
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person can
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 take a 7-day break from work which is compulsory by law. A feast is catered to every
members
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member
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in
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of
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 a family to celebrate
family
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a family
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 relatives reunion.
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, we light up fireworks and sing songs to create good memories. People tend to visit relatives and friends with gifts. The best part which I relish most is the
cozy
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cosy
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 atmosphere. Everybody is delightful as they are enjoying their vocation and have a good hope for the next new
year
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.
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, individuals are saying
congradulations
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congratulations
 to each other to show respect and admiration. That’s all I want to
introduce
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tell
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 you about the Chinese New
Year
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 ceremony. Best regards,

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coherence cohesion
Organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. For example, start a new paragraph when you describe the New Year celebrations and another one for what you like about the celebrations.
task achievement
Make sure to provide a complete response to the prompt. You could add more details about how people feel and act during the New Year, and maybe some historical context or unique traditions that make it special in your country.
task achievement
You have maintained a suitable and friendly tone which is appropriate for a letter to a friend.
coherence cohesion
You included a greeting and closing, which bookends your letter nicely.
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