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Many children nowadays are spending more and more time inside rather than outside. Is this a positive or negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your knowledge or experience

#children #time #trend
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contemporary
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 day ,a highly controversial issue whether
relate
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 to
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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 who are staying a long
time
 inside their homes ,
however
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 some people
view
that is
 positive , while others believe that
are bring
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 consequence negatives. I personally, advocate
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the statement
in
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which
children
 must spend most of their
time
 inside .In
this
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I am
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I am
 going to examine the phenomenon from both
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 and I will support my ideas with real-
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relevant
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To begin
 with, recently many believers argue that
children
 spending most of their
time
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thier
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their
activities
 inside
thier
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their
 homes ,
therefore
 they
are consider
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that is
 so crucial and positive .The main reason for believing
that is
children
 can be safer when they were inside
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because their parents would watch them .
Also
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 the
activities
 which are
doing
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 inside quietly organized and undergo
to
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 many comfortable roles in which
children
 feel that they
are not restrict
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 with any
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challenges
challenge
.
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A good
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A good
 illustration
,
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is that many families provide suitable
activities
 that fit their
children
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 attitudes and interests .
Moreover
, inside
activities
are enhance
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 social bond for
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children
children's
childrens
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children
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,
For
instance
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last
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 survey
has
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conducted in different schools are obvious that most
of
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children
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the children
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 who are spending their
time
 inside could
to
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be successful more than others who are spending their
time
 outdoor.
On the other hand
, some opponents
view
 that the outdoor
activities
in
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which
children
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 to be out may bring downsides for them .The critical reason for that claim is that
sometime
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children
 face some climate
factulation
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actuation
 which
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hinders
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 them to be comfortable .
Furthermore
, staying out for
long
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time
 may affect
on
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the
children
's
body
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.
For
example
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children
 who are spending
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a long
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along
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time
faraway
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 from their shelter so
it
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may feel tedious and that
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 them feel tired. In conclusion, In the modern day, many arguments are obvious that there are different
view
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on
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the importance of spending
children
 their
activities
 inside, while others
view
 that
the
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outdoor activity is negative .In my opinion, staying and
practice
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activities
 are
regard
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the
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 suitable place for
children
 to be safer and
peaceful
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more peaceful
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 .
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