Many children nowadays are spending more and more time inside rather than outside. Is this a positive or negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your knowledge or experience
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children
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the children
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be successful more than others who are spending their Fix the infinitive
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make
them feel tired.
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children
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children
to be safer and peaceful
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more peaceful
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