Many children nowadays are spending more and more time inside rather than outside. Is this a positive or negative trend? Give reasons for your answer and include examples from your knowledge or experience
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children
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relvant
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with, recently many believers argue that children
spending most of their time
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their
activities
inside thier
homes , Correct your spelling
their
therefore
they are consider
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consider
that is
so crucial and positive .The main reason for believing that is
children
can be safer when they were inside ,
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children
feel that they are not restrict
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,
is that many families provide suitable Remove the comma
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activities
that fit their children
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children's
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are enhance
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enhance
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children
children's
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children
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the children
time
inside could to
be successful more than others who are spending their Fix the infinitive
apply
time
outdoor.
On the other hand
, some opponents view
that the outdoor activities
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which Change preposition
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children
requires
to be out may bring downsides for them .The critical reason for that claim is that Change the verb form
require
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sometimes
children
face some climate factulation
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actuation
hinder
them to be comfortable .Correct subject-verb agreement
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a long
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children
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a long
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a long
time
faraway
from their shelter so Correct your spelling
far away
it
may feel tedious and that Correct pronoun usage
apply
make
them feel tired.
In conclusion, In the modern day, many arguments are obvious that there are different Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
view
sides which assert the importance of spending heir their enterprise inside, while others view
that the outdoor activity is negative .In my opinion, staying and practice
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