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Some people think that museum should be enjoyable place to entertain people while others believe that the purpose of them is to educate.discuss both views and give your opinion..

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There has been a controversy about whether
museums
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 should be enjoyable or educational. I think
museums
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 can be entertaining and educational, and my reasons will be explained in the following paragraphs.
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, they serve as a recorder of
history
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. As we know, there
are
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 hundreds and thousands of all sorts of
museums
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 around the world; some
are
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 national
museums
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 that have the most precious antiques; some
are
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 new
museums
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,
such
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 as technical
museums
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.
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, all of them play a similar role, which is recording
history
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;
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, visitors can understand the progress of
history
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 by visiting these
museums
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. Take The Palace
Museum
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 as an example. It is famous for its valuable antiques, which record the development of Chinese
history
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, and they can open visitors' eyes.
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, the content of particular
museums
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 is appealing. It's expected that different
museums
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 serve different purposes; some
are
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 historical
museums
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, and some
are
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 new media
museums
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. Take me as an example. I have been to a technical
museum
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 in Berlin, and it was an eye-opener for me. It didn't only teach people scientific knowledge; it was
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 an entertaining place.
For example
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, there was a
kids
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' club exclusively for
kids
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. During the weekend, parents can take their children to
this
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museum
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;
kids
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 can play in the
kids
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' club, and parents can enjoy the artwork here. In my opinion,
museums
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 can serve these two purposes.
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, I have read an article about a
museum
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 which held a treasure hunt activity while they were having an exhibition about Pharaohs.
This
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museum
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 was popular during that period of time because children could participate in that engrossing activity, and adults could enjoy the breath-taking antiques. In conclusion, I believe
museums
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 can be entertaining and educational.
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