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Fossil fuels, such ad coal, oil and natural gas, are used in many countries. But in some countries, the use of alternative sources of energy, including wind and solar power, has been encouraged. Is this trend a positive or a negative development?

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With the advancement of technology, there are abundant sources of
energy
 and people have their own choices to use the
energy
 to make living even better. The most commonly consumed
energy
 was mostly sourced from fossil fuels.
However
, in some other countries, due to huge concern for the natural environment, people tend to use other sources of
energy
 like solar and
wind
power
 and from my point of view, I feel it is a positive development.
This
 is because, in the
first
 place, the using solar and
wind
 are free of cost as it generates from nature. Unlike man-made energies like coal and oil, it doesn't need to procure or require effort to produce air and sun
besides
 set up equipment expenditure and work. Since the source of
energy
 is free and gifted by nature in abundance, one can set up
wind
 or solar
power
 at any time.
Secondly
, It is eco-friendly and free of air and water pollution. Using solar and
wind
power
 not only reduces the expenses but
also
 generates
energy
 in a harmless manner for the environment and people.
Moreover
, since it generates
power
 in large, the benefit is at large to society at a cheaper rate. Overall it helps to make life even better and more comfortable uniformly. Having said that, it
also
 possesses negative development as well
such
 as destruction of the environment while constructing the structure.
for example
, while Bhutan looking for construction of solar
power
 in one of the states, it has taken around 30 acres of land which repercurred in
lossing
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losing
 the pasture land for farmers. So it
also
 costs loss to the farmers and animals due to the destruction of the forest.
Nonetheless
, in nutshell, the positive impact weighs higher than the negative developments and
hence
energy
 to use
natural
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