Task 1 Academic Graph charts show various activities in a US office in 1980 , 2000
The flow chart illustrates how
sugar
is been processed from sugar
cane in seven different steps.
Overall
, as per the schema chart, sugar
production involves several steps such
as growing, harvesting, crushing, purifying juice
, evaporating, centrifuging, and drying and cooling.
In the very beginning, the sugar
cane plant must be planted. The gestation period to become mature to harvest is 12- 18 months. After these long months, the pants are harvested either by machinery or manually. Then
it is taken to crush in a crushing machine to produce juice
and later the yield juice
is purified using a limestone filter.
After the juice
is been purified, it is then
heated in a container in order to convert it to syrup. The process is called evaporation. Further
, the syrup is centrifuged to segregate sugar
crystals from the syrup. Lastly
, the final step involved drying and cooling the sugar
that was yielded from centrifugation. These are all the steps required to produce sugar
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words sugar, juice with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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