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Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. While others believe that these sites are beneficial. What is your opinion?

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In recent years there have been greatly influenced by the different social media platforms by many
people
 and communities. Some
people
 believe that these kinds of social
sites
 bring us many advantages. I recognize these platforms are more detrimental to the
people
 and society. In
this
 essay, I am going to discuss some of the downsides of the use of these social media.
Firstly
, in terms of sharing the
information
 on these
sites
 is not verified
therefore
 anyone can upload any kind of
information
 without any central authority to check the authentication.
As a result
, those who access these social
sites
 might be mis-leaded to false
information
. To illustrate, recently there was a new spread over Facebook about the death of the US new president which was proven fake
information
.
This
 gets more worst when we as individual does not verify the
information
 and share it with our friend and family and
this
 keeps misguiding others.
Secondly
, what kind of data is available and what we are consuming from
this
 social networking is important for the individual and as a community. These days there are many
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unappropriated data available which are not suitable for teenagers.
For example
, as per latest data consumption record from the central government of India show that there are 60-65% of
people
 access porn content through Facebook account.
This
 could be destructive for teenagers. In conclusion,
although
 social networking
sites
 are helpful as communication media, I believe that we should not ignore the harmful potential related to the use of
this
 kind of social site.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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