You live in a room in college which you share with another student. You find it difficult to work there because he or she always has friends visiting. They have parties in the room and sometimes borrow your things without asking Write a letter to the Accommodation Officer at the college and ask for a new room next term. You would prefer a single room. Explain your reasons

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to express my dissatisfaction with my current dormitory. Currently, I live with a senior student who has made it extremely discomforting for me. Let me explain my plight in more detail. I recently transferred to the school and got posted to my present room which I think it's a great mistake.

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is because my roommate parties often and

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invite her friends over who

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use my personal stuff without my permission.

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has made it impossible for me to study adequately because they make a lot of noise.

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, my grades have been poor

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semester and I really require an outstanding score to keep my scholarship. Would it be possible to get a new space

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session?. If yes, a one-man room would be preferable to allow me to prepare for my finals. It would be a great delight to have a positive response to my request. Looking forward to it,please. Yours faithfully, Adedolapo Akinjagunla.

Submitted by adedolapooye on Mon Aug 22 2022

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