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In the modern world, the image (photograph or film) is becoming a more powerful way of communicating than the written word. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the current world,
pictures
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 are becoming a more vital medium of interaction
instead
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 of text.I totally agree with
this
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 view because citizens dislike reading written materials and
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prefer
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easy understanding.The essay will explain in detail the reasons for my stance
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 examples in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin
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 with ,the primary factor portrait is
significant
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 means of communication
that is
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 simple to interpret.It is easy to understand photos rather than text because written words are ambiguous.
For instance
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,when someone writes kick the bucket,a lot of inhabitants will not understand the meaning because it has a literal understanding.
Although
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 artists will benefit , students will suffer.
While
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 it is simple to know the meaning of a portrait of people wearing black
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, which
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 means they are mourning their loved ones or someone is dead.
Therefore
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 ,people admire communicating with
pictures
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 because of
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their simple
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 understanding.
Secondly
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,another reason
pictures
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 are a crucial form of communication nowadays is
the
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that the
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 majority of citizens do not like reading.People are more inclined to read images rather than written words.In
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apply
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addition
movies
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, movies
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 are a better way to send messages across the globe because reading a text is boring to a lot of the public.For
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 majority of the public fails to read instructions on the street compared to photos.
Moreover
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, it serves as of form of advertisement.Companies are using
pictures
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 to advertise so that their customers will get the meaning fast.Most billboards and flyers are easy to understand because of the images on them
which
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, which
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 serve as a form of promotion to companies. In conclusion,the dislike for reading passages by inhabitants and easy interpretation are the two reasons for the popularity of photographs and films as a current mode of interaction.

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content/organization
Plan your essay. State your view in the start and keep to it. Make sure each idea supports it.
language
Use simple and correct words. Check grammar and spell a few common errors.
content
Give real, clear examples and explain them. Show how they fit your point.
cohesion
Link your ideas with easy words. Use 'also', 'because', 'but', and similar words to keep flow.
content
You show a clear view and try to back it with ideas.
structure
There is a plan in your text with an intro, body, and conclusion.
Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Visual communication
  • Emotional impact
  • Transcend language barriers
  • Universality
  • Infographic
  • Memory retention
  • Misinterpretation
  • Manipulation
  • Complementary
  • Evocative
  • Multimedia
  • Contextual understanding
  • Ambiguity
  • Visual literacy
  • Instant communication
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