International travel has many advantages to both travelers and the country visited. Do you think advantages outweigh disadvantages?
Nowadays international
travel
has become well-known all around the world. Therefore
, it has many impacts on both tourists
and host countries
. To my extent, I think that the bad effects it has are more severe than the advantages due to several reasons.
On the one hand, the host countries
can make profits from international travel
. As travelling abroad becomes more and more famous, many countries
experience a steep rise in the number of tourists
visiting which gives rise to a
high demand for new tourism facilities and jobs, especially people in the hospitality industry. Remove the article
apply
Furthermore
, being able to visit a foreign country mean that tourists
could have the opportunities to see a variety of different cultures from their own. As a result
, they can know a lot of things, widen their knowledge and witness many beautiful sceneries that they have never seen before.
On the other hand
, international travel
is the reason to
many of the problems of the environment. Change preposition
for
Traveling
abroad can lead to overbuilding of tourism infrastructure. As more Change the spelling
Travelling
tourists
come, more building
will be built, which destroy the nearby environment and can be the cause of the disappearance of many native plants and animals in the host Fix the agreement mistake
buildings
countries
. In addition
, more buildings are built means more oil and fossil fuels are used to run the building, which releases more carbon dioxide to
the air and Change preposition
into
pollute
the natural habitats.
To conclude, Correct subject-verb agreement
pollutes
although
international travel
enhances the local countries
economy greatly and increases their fame in the world, its disadvantages to the local environment Change noun form
countries'
country's
is
more severe because of the damage Correct subject-verb agreement
are
Wrong verb form
caused
causes
by crowds and visitors.Correct your spelling
caused
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