Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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The Public transportation sector is a part of any government budget. Some believe that

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rail and not

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should benefit from public funding.

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essay will discuss why I partially agree as

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believe that, a balance should be struck between the two sectors.

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one hand, investing in the subway system has

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own advantages.

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would lead to better track networks between stations and

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the state of the stations themselves; thereby providing incentives for more people to use the

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which is better for the environment as most

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trains use renewable energy. It is

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more cost-effective, reducing the financial burden of the consumers.

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, I believe that there are enough established

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networks.

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, the government cannot entirely abandon the roads. Currently, there is an extremely high incidence of

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, and most of these could be linked to bad roads.

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, most expressways around the country have potholes and

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who

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these highways end up having fatal casualties trying to avoid these potholes In conclusion, both the subway system and the

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requires government funding for maintenance and it would beneficial for both to

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receive

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receive

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financial backing

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.5

Complete response

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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4 paragraphs

209 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

sustainability
environmental footprint
efficiency
pollution
cost-effectiveness
economic development
accessibility
public transportation
congestion
air pollution
initial investment
maintenance
upgrades
rural
urban
last-mile connectivity

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Government should spend more money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree

Fully explain your ideas

Young people are often influenced by their peers. Do the advantages of peer pressure outweigh the disadvantages.

At the present time, the population of some countries includes relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

Some people think that Olympics games are exciting events that bring other nations together. Others say Olympics is a waste of money could be better spent on other things. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

In many cities an increaing number of people do not knowtheir neighbours and there is a lack of sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?

Some people think secondary school students should study international news as one of their subjects, while others believe that this is a waste of valuable school time.