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The growth of online shopping will one day lead to all shops in towns and cities closing. Do you agree or disagree?

#growth #shops #towns #cities
These days, online shopping is proliferating day by day for a number of reasons and
as a result
, many local
shops
 in urban and rural areas are shutting down. There are two main factors responsible for
this
 development
such
 as cheap goods supplied by online
shops
 and a convenient way to place and receive an order. I agree with
this
 view and in the upcoming paragraph, I will give a detailed explanation of
this
 occurrence. Online
shops
 provide a lucrative price for their products which are usually quite less expensive than what we find in the local market. Because of less running cost of online
shops
, they keep a lean margin on their items and
as a result
, consumers get the best offer compared to the local market
shops
.
For instance
, an online shop does not require renting or buying an expensive place to sell the goods
as a result
 overall cost of the items reduce.
Therefore
, traders can sell the products at many reasonable rates. Online shopping is a convenient way to buy things from the internet, just all we need is a smartphone and an internet connection. Online shopping mobile applications have become new
shops
 for many people because they can scroll up the screen and find the best quality with the best price tag from the vast selection list.
Additionally
,
this
 can be done at their convenience at any time, from anywhere.
Moreover
, online
shops
 provide home delivery so, the buyers should not bother about going out to collect their orders. In conclusion, the closing of many physical
shops
 around us is mainly due to the high demand for online shopping among many people and
this
 is because of less expensive and convenient for the consumers.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • e-commerce
  • brick-and-mortar
  • physical stores
  • online retailers
  • retail apocalypse
  • digital economy
  • consumer behavior
  • sustainability
  • commercial landscape
  • high-street
  • consumer trends
  • augmented reality
  • showrooms
  • carbon footprint
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