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Consumers are faced with increasing numbers of advertisements from competing companies. To what extent do you think consumers are influenced by advertisements? What measures can be taken to protect them?

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In recent years, there are more and more businesses which make an abundance of
advertisements
 to compete with their counterparts. I believe
this
 kind of situation has contributed to some detrimental impacts on customers.
This
 essay is going to introduce some solutions to affix
this
 problem. For one thing, the increasing number of
advertisements
 certainly make
people
 feel annoyed when they are watching their favourite TV program, every time the culmination is about to come,
advertisements
 will pop out and interrupt the TV program.
For another
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 thing, some
advertisements
 will not provide
people
 with correct information, so they will be misled and waste money buying something that does not live up to their expectations. For the
last
 thing, the worst situation is that some ill-intentioned businesses will use
advertisements
 to scam others and make them fall into a financial predicament. In order to deal with
this
 problem, the government should introduce some legislation against it.
For example
, the government can ask all companies to reveal all the information about the products transparently, so that customers will not be cheated.
In addition
,
people
 should cultivate the ability of media literacy to help them distinguish some exaggerated and misleading
advertisements
.
Therefore
, if companies violate the regulations and keep offering
advertisements
 which will confuse customers,
people
 can protect themselves and boycott the products made by them. In conclusion, as far as I am concerned,
although
advertisements
 cause some inimical effects on
people
's lives, we still can prevent some negative influences from happening and make the world a better place.
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