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Some people feel that the government should regulate the level of violence in films on television and at the cinema. Others feel that violent films should not be regulated. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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People hold different opinions about violent scenes in films on television and at the cinema. While some individuals think that the government should not have control over the
level
 of
violence
, I vehemently oppose
this
 scenario. There are 2 main reasons
for
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why people counter the idea of regulating the
level
 of
violence
 in movies.
First
 of all, there is a part of cinema enthusiasts who enjoy the high intensity of a cinematographic work. These viewers see violent
elements
 as a stress reliever so for them, these particular parts of a movie are indispensable.
As a result
, films without brutal
contents
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 appear to be not appealing to some audiences.
This
 would lead to the
second
 reason, which relates directly to the financial aspect of producers. As the interest in nonviolent movies decreases, there would be a significant loss in
the
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turnover which
also
 affects the reputation of these moviemakers.
This
 scenario encourages producers to add more violent
elements
 to their cinematic works.
In contrast
 to the idea of a non-restricted violent
level
 in films, I strongly believe that the extent of
violence
 should be regulated by the government. The main reason for
this
 opinion of mine is the terrible effect of brutal
elements
 on
children
. Without any kind of regulation,
children
from
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 different ages would accidentally engage with inappropriate content which would have a bad influence on both their mental health and their
demeanor
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. Studies have shown that violent
elements
 in movies could lead to violent
behaviors
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of
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children
 since they have the tendency to imitate what they see.
Additionally
, the mind of young
children
 which is not fully developed yet can be haunted by violent scenes and
results
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 in various mental issues
such
 as phobia and sleep deprivation. In conclusion,
although
 it is still debatable whether the government should modulate the
level
 of
violence
 in cinematographic works, I would adamantly claim that the regulation
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 violent
elements
 is indispensable.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • regulation
  • vulnerable groups
  • age restrictions
  • censorship
  • real-life aggression
  • healthier society
  • creative freedom
  • free speech
  • artistic vision
  • cultural narratives
  • personal responsibility
  • viewing choices
  • balanced approach
  • rating systems
  • parental guidance
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