In some countries, more young adults continue to live with their parents even after they have completed education and found jobs. Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?

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, many youths in certain countries are residing with their
parents
even after graduating from their studies and receiving employment opportunities. In my opinion, the advantages of
this
issue
outweight
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outweigh
outweighs
the disadvantages. The essay will
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analyse
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analyse
living with
parents
will help them not feel lonely as the benefit and living in the same
house
with mom and dad is easy to violate an adult's private life as a drawback before clarifying the conclusion. On the one hand, letting
parents
in old age
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in a
house
without laughter and voices will make them feel bored and lonely. At
this
time when
parents
come of age, there will be times when there is an emergency and need you at
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that
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that
time so we should be more careful about living with our
parents
and taking care of them.
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, near my
house
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there is a woman who is over 60 years old. She suffers from dementia and
sometime
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wander
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the streets and her
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children
childrens
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children
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had to work far away and leave her alone in the
house
. It got worse when suddenly one day she got sick and needed help but no
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one
onw
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one
was there so that made her worse and passed away. It can be seen that
parents
always want their children to live together so after their children graduate from college, they always take the time to listen to their son's
decision
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and they will be very happy. If the son chooses to live with them because that will solve many problems about the economy and help
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family
relationship
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.
On the other hand
, living in the same
house
with
parents
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privacy will be easily affected. In many surveys psychologists have shown that
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with
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elder
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people can form much negative affection.
Moreover
, the privacy of the child may be violated and tight control affects the psycho, leading to poorer relationships with family members. In conclusion,
although
adults can have an easier life when staying in their
house
, they will not be able to become mature people.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cohabitation
  • intergenerational living
  • self-sufficiency
  • financial stability
  • maturation
  • dependency
  • socio-economic factors
  • familial dynamics
  • personal autonomy
  • housing affordability
  • cultural expectations
  • life trajectory
  • emotional resilience
  • nuclear family
  • joint family system
  • economic prudence
  • privacy concerns
  • social stigma
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