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A large company in your area has decided to spend a certain amount of money, either to sponsor a local children's sport team for two years, or two pay for two open-air concerts. It has asked for feedback from the general public. Write a letter to the company. In your letter describe the benefits of sponsoring the sport team. Summaries the benefits of paying for the concerts. And say how you think the company should spend the money.

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Dear sir or madam, As a resident of White Deer Town for 40 years, I am so glad your company is going to invest in the community by sponsoring the running costs of a baseball
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 or organization of a couple of concerts. Without a local professional sports
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 here, I am sure a local sports
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, even though it is an under-11 one, will definitely draw cheering crowds every Saturday whenever opposing teams are visiting. Not only can it improve business opportunities for shops and restaurants but it can
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 enable the
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 members to develop a spirit of competitiveness, endurance and discipline.
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, while organizing a couple of concerts can
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 draw crowds, probably from outside the town,
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boost local businesses, and let the adolescents have a crazy night, the merits are not as long-lasting as that of running a baseball
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. With that being said, I would root for the idea of sponsoring a local baseball
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 for two years and hope your prestigious company can
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.
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 faithfully, Alan Heart

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Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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