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Advertising discourage people from being different individuals by making us all want to do the same and look the same. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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 have been around our life due to media advancement. Some tend to think that
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 kind of promotion may lead to that all of us becoming the same no matter in appearances or what we do. In my own opinion, I think, in a short
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, it may be but in a long
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 people would
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 be reasonable. On the one hand, advertising encourages us to be the same.
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, it makes us wear the same.
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, about from 2014 to 2016, due to substantial
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 for New Balance, when you walked on a street, you can see that almost 80% of people wore sports shoes by New Balance.
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, due to the promotion of Tibet, many travellers choose
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 special place as their
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 destination; Due to the promotion of a movie,
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 as future wars, many choose to watch
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 movie; Due to public bikes advertising, many choose to ride a bike to work.
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, when you observe the pedestrians on a street, it is difficult to find that some still wear the New Balance shoes. Tibet is now not the
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 destination for travellers. They may choose Yunnan, Xian. The Movie, Future Wars, would fade at most 3 months later. Several years later,
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 some people continue to ride a bike to work, the number has reduced greatly and there are many who choose to drive a car or take a train.
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, in a long
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, consumers would return to be reasonable, do what they like and are not influenced by the previous
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. In conclusion, admittedly, there is no doubt that
advertisements
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 would have a great impact on us being the same.
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, in most cases, it would just
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 for a short period of time. In a long
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, consumers would keep reasonable and choose according to their interests to show unique to others
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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