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Some people are born to be a leadership others belive that leadership can be learned. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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 view about where captainship skills come from. It
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 as a blessing from God which is known as a talent whereas believed as a proficiency that can develop from the learning process. I will discuss both my opinions. People believe that every human is born with a unique character. It dominating come from his or her parent's DNA. The characteristics feature is
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 just attached as a gift from God,
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 somebody has a
skill
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 automatically
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leadership
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skill
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. We can feel
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 skilled event a
child
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 in a toddler age stage. When children play together in the playground, sometimes we found there is a leader in the game or
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activity.
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 that crying because he did not have a ball session,
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usually
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 there is a
child
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behaves
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 as dominating to lead another
child
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to give him a chance.
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 when other children to
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 his direction. The youngster has the
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 to influence others automatically.
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, some people said
leadership
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 is a science that can be learned. There are so many subjects linked to
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 in the social courses at University. Usually, we found
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 the management course title. When the
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 believe will be a leader in the future, they
taught
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 a
leadership
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 concept to know how they can influence others to gain a goal in their organizations.
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 that, it is often used as training that enhanced a person's
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 skills beginner to advance. To conclude, if somebody is born to be a leader,
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 will automatically easier to do a task because he used to act as a dominant person in the
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child
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 phase. If he or her not have a
skill
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earlies
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, it may
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 develop
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 a learning process in formal education or non-formal
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training.
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