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Some people believe that the internet is increasing the gap between the rich and poor, while others argue that it helps to reduce this gap. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The
internet
 is changing our
world
 at a dramatic pace. Yet, it is not clear who benefits the most. Does the
internet
 help the rich to become richer, or does it actually help the poor close the gap? I believe that the
internet
 presents a unique opportunity to make our
world
 equal. Those who argue that the
internet
 mainly helps the rich have a point.
Firstly
, only
people
 who have
access
 to it can benefit from it.
Although
internet
access
 is becoming more common, many
people
 with low incomes still do not have stable broadband at home and are less likely to gain from
this
 technology. As for the business
world
, the
internet
 clearly accelerates the growth of successful companies,
such
 as Amazon and Facebook, which cannibalize small businesses. In
this
 way, it rewards the owners of large corporations, mainly based in developed countries, and hurts smaller local businesses and
people
 working for them.
Although
 the rich can clearly use the
internet
 to their advantage, I still believe that it is the poor who benefits the most. In the past, one’s location determined to a large extent their
access
 to education and well-paid jobs but today,
this
 is less true. Distance learning allows
people
 to gain knowledge and skills that are not available in their area.
Then
, they can apply these skills to work remotely for companies based in richer parts of the
world
 and earn higher salaries.
As a result
, more
people
 get
access
 to opportunities that used to be available only to the wealthy few.
That is
 why I think that the
internet
 actually helps to make income distribution more equal. In conclusion, the
internet
 opens far wider
access
 to opportunities for both individuals and businesses.
This
 is why, in my opinion,
this
 technology has a great potential to narrow the gap between rich and poor.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital divide
  • wealth gap
  • accessibility
  • disadvantaged
  • empowerment
  • digital skills
  • online resources
  • financial disparities
  • bridging the gap
  • digital inclusion
  • economic inequality
  • equal opportunities
  • digital divide
  • information age
  • socioeconomic divide
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