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Convenience foods will become increasingly prevalent and eventually replace traditional foods and preparatory methods. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#convenience #foods #methods
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ONE WIDELY HELD OPINION IS THAT THE TENDENCY OF CONSUMING FAST FOOD IS INCREASING AND EVENTUALLY IT WILL TAKE OVER HOME COOKING.
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 ESSAY WILL DISAGREE WITH
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 STATEMENT BECAUSE HOMEMADE MEALS SUPPORT MENTAL HEALTH AND THEY ARE MORE HYGIENIC THAN ORDERED ONES.
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 AND FOREMOST, NOT ONLY DOES COOKING PUSH THE FEELING OF HUNGER, BUT
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 HELPS
PEOPLE
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 LESSEN THEIR STRESS. IT CAN NOT BE SEEN ONLY AS A PROVIDER OF FOOD, IT IS A CEREMONY FROM SHOPPING FOR NECESSARY INGREDIENTS TO SERVE IT.
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, IF I HAD NOT PREPARED A SPECIAL MEAL FOR MYSELF AFTER A TIRESOME DAY, I WOULD HAVE SUFFERED FROM DEPRESSION. I SEE THESE TIMES OF MY DAY AS MY TREATMENT SESSIONS AS OTHER
PEOPLE
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 CONSIDER.
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, HOME-COOKING IS MORE STERILE THAN OTHER OPTIONS. THERE WILL ALWAYS BE
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 WHO PREFER TO KNOW THE INGREDIENTS AND COOKING CIRCUMSTANCES OF THE DISH THEY EAT. AS WE CAN SEE DURING COVID-19, EVERYONE PREFERRED AND
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 LEARNT TO COOK AND LOTS OF LOCAL RESTAURANTS ANNOUNCED THEIR BANKRUPTCY. WHEN IT COMES TO HEALTH,
PEOPLE
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 IMMEDIATELY WOULD GIVE UP ORDERING ONLINE AND RETURN TO THEIR ROOTS. TO CONCLUDE,
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 THERE ARE SOME ARGUMENTS THAT TRADITIONAL FOODS AND METHODS TO COOK WILL DISAPPEAR
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 OF THAT
PEOPLE
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 WILL CONSUME ONLY CONVENIENCE FOODS, BECAUSE THE WAY OF COOKING SERVE AS MENTAL TREATMENT AND IT IS MORE HYGIENIC THAN ORDERING, THE ARGUMENT SEEMS IMPOSSIBLE.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • prevalent
  • convenience foods
  • traditional foods
  • preparatory methods
  • advancement
  • lifestyle
  • health concerns
  • healthier alternatives
  • cultural implications
  • culinary practices
  • environmental impact
  • globalization
  • preserve
  • embracing
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