Modern forms of communication such as email and messaging have reduced the amount of time people spend seeing their friends. This has a negative effect on their social lives. To what do you agree or disagree?

The amount of
time
people
spend seeing their
friends
has diminished. The main cause is that modern forms of
communication
such
as WhatsApp, telegram and other
communication
apps.
This
has a detrimental effect on social lives. In my view, I agree that the
time
people
spend seeing their
friends
is essential, albeit life requirements can be caused to separate
people
from their
friends
. One of the major reasons, the
time
people
spend seeing their
friends
is essential is that it helps each other.
For example
, I need to repair some of the places in my home, which alone I can not do
it
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.
Although
I can call my friend to come to help me in
this
situation. We can do it very fast and obviously. If my friend had been far away I could not repair it on my own. I need to find some builder for reparation, which it takes more
time
to fund and I should pay him for reparation. Another example is that at the weekend they can spend their
time
happily, like organising some parties or going to the cinema.
Nevertheless
, modern forms of
communication
such
as email and messaging play an equally important role between
people
and their
friends
.
For instance
,
people
prefer to spend
time
with
friends
or have a home near their
friends
, albeit the main cause of being distance between
people
is distance and their
friends
is a life requirement. In
this
situation, modern forms of
communication
like email and messaging play an equally important role.
People
can use
this
type of
communication
and obviously be aware of the circumstances of their
friends
.
However
, in my childhood, I had a good friend and we spent a lot of
time
with each other,
although
they relocated their home far away. There are for that we did not use modern
communication
, to
this
time
we are not in contact. In conclusion,
while
I agree that
people
spend their
time
on face-to-face chat is an essential part of
people
's relationships, I firmly assert that using modern ways of
communication
is remarkably important for those who lack
time
to meet.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • modern forms of communication
  • email
  • messaging
  • reduce
  • amount of time
  • see friends
  • social lives
  • technology
  • communication
  • faster
  • convenient
  • stay in touch
  • connect
  • online
  • social media platforms
  • meet new people
  • face-to-face interactions
  • maintain relationships
  • excessive reliance
  • social isolation
  • digital communication
  • emotional depth
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