Some people believe that teenagers should be required to do unpaid community work in their free time. This can benefit teenagers and the community as well. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

There are many crucial morals and responsibilities schools and parents should
instill
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in children from a young age. These responsibilities are divided into collective and personal ones.
This
essay will discuss
community
work as a collective responsibility for
teenagers
and whether
its
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beneficial to the
community
or not. Encouraging children from a young age to take
advantages
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of their free time and spend it
to do
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something beneficial for a healthy up lifting childhood.
This
factor will help children to think positively when reaching the difficult stage in their lives which is the teenage period. It is highly encouraged by parenting life coaches that
teenagers
should feel a sense of belonging
towards
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their
community
.
This
could be achieved by involving them to
take
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part in free
community
services
such
as planting in the
neighborhood
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, painting their school walls or
help
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in renovating houses of the poor. The
rewarding
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and happiness these
community
jobs will have on its user will build confidence in those
teenagers
and encourage them to live in
this
world with a great cause.
This
could
also
be a good trial to experience and try different hobbies that can open doors for future jobs. Many communities struggle
from
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juvenile crimes. We are witnessing wars and economical
struggle
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struggles
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where
teenagers
are getting involved in drugs and sexual
harassments
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harassment
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and abuse. In
this
case
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a paid
community
service will encourage these undisciplined youngsters to spend their time in a rewarding
job
where they can feel responsible
towards
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themselves and others. Another factor of having a paid
job
is the hours needed to spend on a certain task. As an example, if a certain
community
service
job
demands several hours or weeks for the task to be fulfilled, an amount should be paid as compensation
of
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the time spend. In conclusion, I think not all
community
services should be
an
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unpaid
service
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services
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. Depending on the circumstances of those
teenagers
an organization could take the lead and
responsibility
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to decide whether
this
job
should be paid or not. As mentioned,
this
depends on many factors
such
as hours needed and
nature
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of the task required.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • required
  • unpaid
  • community work
  • benefit
  • teenagers
  • life skills
  • volunteering
  • empathy
  • compassion
  • socially aware
  • responsible
  • interact
  • diverse backgrounds
  • cultural understanding
  • tolerance
  • work experience
  • essential skills
  • employment
  • interests
  • passions
  • career development
  • contribute
  • betterment
  • development
  • local community
  • mental well-being
  • stress
  • self-esteem
  • burden
  • academic
  • personal lives
  • time management
  • support
  • balance
  • participate
  • encouraged
  • numerous benefits
  • individuals
  • conclusion
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