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Some people regard eating meat as completely wrong. To what extent do you agree?

#people #meat
For many years individuals have been arguing regarding using meat in
the
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food
. While the
first
 group believe that it is not ethical and even harmful to human health, the others suggest that it is normal to eat animal-based
food
. I completely disagree with the statement that it would be better to eat only vegetarian
food
 and my points will be reviewed
further
 in the scope of
this
 essay.
First
, it is crucial to eat chicken, beef and other similar types of
food
 since it contains a lot of vital elements of our organism. Basically, every day we have to get numerous ingredients to be full of energy, efficient, and attentive. The researchers point out that the disbalance in our diet can lead to detrimental effects.
For example
, some experiments show that people who do not eat meat tend to be less productive than
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.
Second
, it is a question of
a
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price. It is not a secrete that there are some plant substitutions for meat and they even show
high
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 percentage of the same elements. But the bottom line is that
this
 kind of
food
 is expensive in terms of production and it
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alwasy
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always
 affects
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 final price.
For instance
, in my
experience
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 it appears that
the
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vegetarian
vegeterian
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vegetarian
 dishes are always on the expensive side
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 the menu of restaurants. In conclusion, the
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 discussion about the benefits of plant
food
 is in
argueble
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arguable
arguably
. Some people are emotional and do not see the factors like
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 of the
food
 and
advantages
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 for our health. If we gave up using
such
 type of
food
, it would be a disaster for humanity.
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