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Some people believe that children should do educational activities during their Free time. Others say that in this way children are under pressure.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Education
 plays a vital role in everybody's life to build a standard career. Some communities think that
children
 should spend their spare
time
 doing educational activities while some other communities argue with
this
 matter and say that
children
 will feel stress due to their study activities in their
leisure
time
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both scenarios and
then
 I will give my opinion on
this
 matter. On the one side, In
this
 modern era, there is huge competition in
education
.
Children
 are getting experts with their empirical knowledge on their subjects. Parents are
also
 encouraging their
children
 to give the best
education
 by providing all things like computers, etc. It is good to get an
education
 and build a beautiful life.
For example
,
Children
 are very interested in learning new things like an abacus. So they are spending their spare
time
 learning
this
 mathematics technique. On the other side, In
this
 hectic society,
children
 to adults all are facing depression and stress. Mostly,
children
 like to spend their
leisure
time
 playing sports,
video
 games, etc.
Children
 can
also
 improve their abilities by watching
video
 games.
For instance
,if A child plays a
video
 game which consists of multiple levels
this
 will increase the child's skills like problem-solving, thinking power, etc.
Children
 by spending their
leisure
time
 with some sports,
video
 games, etc will build them strongly in both physical way and mental ways. And by spending spare
time
 happily
children
 will not feel stress. To sum up, In my view both
education
 and spending
leisure
time
 happily have their own importance. It is important for
children
 to balance
education
 and other activities to build a good healthy career. But particularly I agree with the latter statement because spending a spare era happily will give a happy life to the
children
.
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