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Demands of food is increasing worldwide, what are the causes of this ? what measures can the international community take to make sure the food supply is enough?

#demands #food #measures #community
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Food
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 request is being
growth
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 around the globe .some new methods and ideas in
agriculture
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the agriculture
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industry
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 and
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lifestyle
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life style
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lifestyle
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 should be used to figure out the consequences . Increasing the whole world population is the
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 reason that
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 to my mind .developments in medical sciences
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 increased awareness about hygiene ,causes higher health level .diseases and natural disaster side effects have been controlled and predicted .all in all lead to dramatic growth in human population .more population means more demands of
food
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. Another reason seems to be is businesses which encourage consumers to use their products more and more, including
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food
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industry
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. wide variety of
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 products and
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high amount of profit which they earn in
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food
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industry
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this facts
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. In my
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 there is no way but
increasing
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food
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supplement
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agriculture
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the agriculture
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industry
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 replacing traditional ways
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 farming with high technology methods. Modern agriculture machinery could help farmers more than human force .watering system should be optimized .above all using modified seeds could guarantee the expecting measurement of crops. farming pests are other issues that should be studied basically because they could
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 all the farming process.
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secondly
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 the amount of
food
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 that each individual really needs and
food
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 storage methods should be modified
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and cultivated
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demands
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of
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food
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 is a real subject to worry and as soon as possible governments have to find the right solutions in different criteria
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 as those has been mentioned above to solve the problem.
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